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The cheap talk is on me tonight
                                         but the gentlemen you are, you bought it all.
Dragging it out like a smoker savors the inhales of a cigarette.
The carbon is escaping through the corners of your lips.
Oxygen runs wild through the strands of my golden locks.
Bandit eyes and a smile I stole from a 10 year old girl.
"Ive kept you close in form of a note."
Admitting that lines 1-20 is your bible which you live by.
            Im downing pure caffiene and,
                      youre casually reciting self flaws as if they were accomplishments.
                                    P o u r i n g   persperation.
The silence between question and anwser grows fond of anticipation.
                                 P e t r i f i e d   and wide eyed.
Id loosen up the mood and release a reply,
"I admire anyone as foolish as you."
          In 8 seconds flat, we fell like kids playing Ring-Around-the-Rosie.
                                                            Our pockets filled with hopes.
                         We will all be blind without our faith.
I wrote this at work.

The boy tells me everything thats wrong with him and the girl tells him why that makes him a beautiful thing.
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flatrabbitfan Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2006
i think this is seriously like my favorite by you
"Id loosen up the mood and release a reply,
"I admire anyone as foolish as you."
In 8 seconds flat, we fell like kids playing Ring-Around-the-Rosie.
Our pockets filled with hopes.
We will all be blind without our faith."

thats my fav. part, its easy to relate to for me
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Really cause its about kids who believe in God and thats what brought them together.
Thanks for the fav.
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flatrabbitfan Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2006
well i took it in a different way, and your welcome.
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Purpl3Sky Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2006
the last line defintly was the most powerful.
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks cause honestly thats what I believe.
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hinderedlove Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2006
I realy love this...But how did you get a different font.
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
OH thanks.
Well for bold you use < b > but with the spaces and to get bold off you use < / b > But again without the spaces. So for italics its < i > and so to get it off you do < / i >. for small font its < sup > to get it off you do < / sup >. Under line is < u > and to get it off < / u >.
Thanks for checking this out. Hopefully I explained it good for you. Im very bad at explanations.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2006
Bandit eyes and a smile I stole from a 10 year old girl.
THIS ^

&&the last line are my favorites.
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks Jocy. It means alot coming from you :)
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letting-go Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2006
this is really good! i liked it alot.
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