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Back bone beautiful,
you make me feel as cheap as a 5.
Strong as currents we thought
we'd make it off of pure lust and lies.
                                           So prince not so charming,
                                               take me under your umbrella
                                               and push me off this building.
                                           Planes are more graceful in a freefall,
                                                more messages and entries
                                                   in a 2 year old diary.
Sorry doll,
but clocks turn like my back
roll into my head
collapse onto my knees
                              This better be it...
spines cringe in digust
knuckles clenched in defeat
Jawsdrop awestucked.
                                                             Yeah,we sure showed them.
:iconsubduedpromises:
I wrote this in like 20 minutes.
Because it just kept coming and coming.
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:iconvandaleyes:
take me under your umbrella
and push me off this building.


i really enjoy that line. it stands out so much.
beautiful words. =)
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:iconsubduedpromises:
~SubduedPromises Jun 17, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you so much :heart:
I really enjoy your gallery.
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:iconvandaleyes:
you're welcome.
i'm glad. :heart:
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:iconslim-beatnik:
~Slim-Beatnik Feb 3, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
Very good.
I'm the quiet type, and I know exactly what that's all about...
and you captured it quite nicely.
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~SubduedPromises Feb 4, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhhhhh thank you. Im the exact same way. Thanks for checking it out. :hug:
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~Slim-Beatnik Feb 4, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
Of course.
We are what makes the others boisterous I suppose.
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:iconxauthorunknown:
i love all the imagery of different bones in the body. and i really like the style of the poem. and the "prince not so charming" part.
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~SubduedPromises Jan 3, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
thanks. and thanks for taking a look at my gallery :heart:
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:iconsehenry07:
beautiful use of symbolism. I dont know if you meant to do it or not, but it works well. :)
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~SubduedPromises Dec 27, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for checking out my stuff!
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