I'll bring you back the sun.
Lasso it from the Pacific sunset
and throw it back up into our skyline.
Embrace its beauty
Cause this may not last long.
I've been praying for days on end now.
Let the light come and peek through your window.
Let it warm your face and greet you
"Hello Gorgeous" every morning.
Cause if I was there thats what I'd be whispering across the pillowcase.
And smirking in complete adoration
"You look amazing at the crack of dawn"
More amazing than you wrapped around me.
I look so helpless in your arms.
We'll fall into an even deeper sleep
and drown in a cotton bliss.
"Hit or Miss Girl."
Hit or m i s s
Cause this may not last long.
Ive been hoping for days on end now.
If I could I'd have kept you near me like a note tucked away in some pages.
kept you near me like a secret at point of exploding and exposing
kept you near me like teens pressed under peer pressure
Ironing bedsheets to bareskin.














Devious Comments
Comments
-What made me like this poem hmmmmm
-Well Ironing bedsheets to bareskin is certainly a line that peaked my intrest
-A couple good, unique images in here but they are not perfectly executed I think it is the fact you used "like" is my problem bad verb choice otherwise you got a perfect image
You have something to be proud of here,
Matt
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