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Unmade bedsheets, long blank stares
Youre an air inhaler, speechless lips
Racing minds, racing hearts
Smeared lipstick, untidy hair
Unstable, unsure
Expressional, hopeful
Inexperienced, innocent
Vulnerable, no control
Rushing Glamour, imperfection
                                                  You call it pressure
                                                    I call you "easy"
                                                 So save the candles.
yeah just take a wild guess.
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black-pen Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2005
:omg: I love it very much. the last 3,4 lines really tie it together so well. Okay I've now read it through twice more and im still in awe of the last lines. Very nice.
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank you! :hug:
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flatrabbitfan Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2005
god your so beautiful
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beautifullyflawed09 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005
i simply love this :heart:

amazing flow, amazing choice of words, amazing emotion
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! :)
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beautifullyflawed09 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005
your welcome :)
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Student Artist
iloveit!!:heart:
by the way, nice topic :P
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! i know but if you think about...theres alot of people that can relate.
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yournotagoodbye Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Student Artist
yeah,no doubt there are...
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Eiros Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005
i love the way it feels like your just DUMPING part of yourself into what you write!
its good
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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ellecrumpets Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
emotion RULES lol. but yeah this is really good!!!
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: emo kids.
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silentscreams357 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005   Photographer
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i love it!

You call it pressure
I call you "easy"
So save the candles.

^^^thats my favorite part^^^
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
minetoo
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xparis-in-flames Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
:O you hooker!
ha just kidding....but pretty sure i can relate to this whole thing.... :S
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
im sorry gurl.
but i aint no holla back gurrrrl :| :giggle:
im a hooker? well if i am you are! :P
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xparis-in-flames Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
thats the most ridiculous song ive ever heard.... fereals.
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
im just ridiculous like that :P
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haven-spear Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
Very nice. Little bit of ryhming. ;)
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! :cuddle:

whats your msn addy?
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haven-spear Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
Eh? You're already on my list. :o
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
youre not on mine add punkrockprincess1618@hotmail.com please
if you want.
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PaStY911 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
I like the emotion in this...no matter what people say, I think emotion is a good thing to express. Nice:)
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PaStY911 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005
I like the emotion in this...no matter what people say, I think emotion is a good thing to express. Nice:)
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
i love emotion too!
thanks! :glomp:
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PaStY911 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005
Wow! I can't beleive that comment worked! My computer went all screwy and I wanted to tell you how much I like that poem. Awesome. Youre welcome :)
I know, emotion is healthy in small amounts...be careful with yourself, youre a person too k? :hug:
Weeeoooooo trying not to sound like your mother LOL Keep up the good writing :)
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SubduedPromises Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
oh goodness... im only15. i havent and wont do anything like this for a long time.
thanks for being like my mom lol :P :)
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PaStY911 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2005
Aww.....yeah well I'm only 17 lol but I used to do crazy shit but its stupid cuz you gotta love who ya are inside Weeee I'm somebody's mum! :hug:
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